Krupp

This is brilliant. It's almost as good as reading through the lyrics of a Tool song. The only thing I would advise is to just get rid of the periods ...

I liked this, because it wasn't like some others I've read which just rant on endlessly. It has a great conclusion, except for one line that bothered me... The ending ...

This seems kind of short, which is surprising... Kinda makes it hard for me to be able to say anything about it. The description was nice, but the ending seemed ...

You know, rarely do I read about dwarves being written as main characters. I find this a cool notion, because it is so rare and fun. I actually would take ...

Well, you warned us about the spitting of rage, so I guess I'm not surprised by what I saw...hahaha. Anger seems to touch a lot of people. I used to ...

Angry, defiant, a true 'f--- it' attitude that really shows the pain seeping through. I have seen plenty of pieces like this, and most of them are barnburners. Excellent job ...

Well, the mere mood of this one is fairly intense and creepy..I'll give you that. At times though it just seems like the lines are purposely vague or something. It's ...

Well...hm.... The story started off with a tad bit of info-dumping that I think could be altered a little bit so that it isn't 'telling' as much as showing. After ...

...Unless there's a part up ahead that explains it, I don't believe this is fantasy fiction...there are other subforums where this would've fit much better. With that said, I'll say ...

Well, I'll be brutally honest, because I don't know how else I can help... The whole work so far consists of the infamous writing mistake called "telling" and I don't ...

This was all right for the start. I think next time maybe you should keep from speaking about your character in the first person unless you introduce special traits to ...

Darnit, I think we might have to read that for school soon. Now I'm suspicious. I despise whining. aye, don't let your teacher tell you it's a great book. You ...

Very angry, this one. More like a Tool song than anything, haha. Not that I'm making fun of it at all. It was very good at delivering that edge of ...

As far as the imagery goes, that's what makes this piece worth reading...the imagery defenitely is entertaining and enjoyable; my favorite part of this whole thing, in fact. My only ...

Another largely impressive piece, man. At times it seems almost too pretentious; however, that is up to the writer to decide, not the reader. The only part that really bothered ...