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“Nah, Mountain Lions don’t attack people, too afraid. Now attack horse, maybe.” Roy debated, and suddenly all their heads turned in unison the sound of hoof beats. That sentence had ...

a punch from you is like a vase falling to the floor and breaking to a million pecies It looks like you had a spelling mistake. Also, i feel like ...

I though I could survive anything Red= typo. Is it supposed to be thought, or all though? make sure to revise that! :)

But... your haven't come lately, typo. :) it's you, not your. or you're. lol, it was a good poem, though!

but their parents had put together two large wooden boxes together colored words= used the word "together" to many times. Try and use it one time.

We decided to check the gym, since that’s what lesson the boys had, had . When we arrived, we saw four boys just stood there looking totally clueless (like they ...

But, I'm getting ahead of myself, this isnt the begining , ohno! Blue: Spelling mistake- isn't Green: Another spelling mistake- beginning Red: Grammar mistake- should be 'oh no!' hope that ...