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Re: Delilah Betrayed
Hey! Welcome to YWS! :D I really like the way you set up the dramatic reveal at the end of this story, especially Emmy's dread as she opens the letter ...
Jun 24, 2012 -
Re: the beauty of beginnings
Hi! :) Ok, so I haven't reviewed anything for months and I might be kind of out of practice, but I found this story interesting so I'm having a go. ...
Jun 23, 2012 -
Re: Terrace Chapter One: The Awakening
Hi! :) So, I read skimmed over the other version of this chapter, and I definitely prefer this one a lot. The spacing makes it easier to read, the pacing ...
Jun 26, 2011 -
Re: Rainbow (Chapter 1)
Hi! Thanks for reading my story! :) So, I like this so far. I like the way the MC's personality comes through in so few paragraphs. Still, I do think ...
Jun 18, 2011 -
Re: Me, My Fears, and You
Hi! :) I liked this a lot. I like how familiar the tone of the letter sounds and how the narrator sounds so tender and affectionate but at the same ...
May 1, 2011 -
Re: Let's get Apocalyptic- Cam's Entry for the Contest
Hi! :D I really liked this. I love how creepy it got at the end, and how you hinted at what was to come with the bugs. That idea of ...
Mar 20, 2011 -
Re: Title pending *suggestions welcome*
Hi! Welcome to YWS! :D This is a really interesting start to the story. I love the idea of her going in the water and coming out dry, and there ...
Mar 11, 2011 -
Re: Deleted
Hi! :) This review is incredibly late. Sorry for being so rubbish at getting round to it. But anyway! I love the bit with the Masquerader being vunerable, and Rostoloff ...
Mar 11, 2011 -
Re: The Clockwork Hand
Hi there! :) This story seems really interesting so far. I like how you had a mix of worldbuilding and describing the setting and setting up the plot, and the ...
Feb 15, 2011 -
Re: Broken But Not Crushed ~Chapter 7
Hi again, Day! :D Aargh, I had a review for this about a third typed out and then the internet went and closed down, so, here we go again. XD ...
Feb 1, 2011 -
Re: 'Cause when you're sixteen (Part One)
Hi! :) I really like this. I'm totally jealous of your kiss writing skills. XD I love the tension between Ophelia and her boyfriend's family, and this is already really ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: The Life, Love, and Adventure of Veronica Riddle [Deleted]
Hi! :) I really like the way premise of this, and bringing in a descendant of Voldemort to be a student of Hogwarts is a great idea for Harry Potter ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Broken But Not Crushed ~Chapter 6
Hi! :) So... this review is ridiculously late. I'm really sorry it took so long. I've been a fairly absent YWSer recently, but review day finally pushed me into getting ...
Jan 30, 2011 -
Re: Creative Writing Assignment: Person, Place and Song
Hi! :) I really like this. The description is really vivid and I love the way you described the setting so well without the story dragging. Also, I like the ...
Jan 11, 2011 -
Re: Broken But Not Crushed ~Chapter 4
Hi again! :) Sorry it took me so long to get round to commenting on this! Partly it's down to me procrastinating, and partly it's down to me really not ...
Dec 19, 2010
