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Re: David and Dante Chapter 4: Smoke
Smoke “Why did you even call him?” David asked his brother. “Diana had the car, why did you call Anton first.” Dante was caught by surprise. “Well… It’s just that ...
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Re: What Happens When You Die Looking Into Your Killer's Eyes?
When your death is being orchestrated, and you're looking your dominant foe in the eyes, do you wonder, "Why me?" or "Why now?" Today a man broke into my castle. ...
Aug 18, 2010 -
Re: Of No Return Ch. One
Welcome to the YWS! Go introduce yourself at the Welcome Mat if you haven't already done so. Now, on to the review I'm sad this is so short, because I ...
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Re: Neither docile nor timid thou art
Neither docile nor timid thou art. Yet with your veritable tenacity you prevail upon my consciousness; an insistence in webbed corners and those always clean. Oh, Thief of all Thieves! ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: .....
Chapter One With only one more year of high school remaining, an Early Acceptance from Columbia University and a timetable for when I’d be able to make my great escape ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: Fixed At Zero [Chapter 6 - Draft]
“Chloe, get down here, now!” Mom cries from the stairwell, less than an hour after our heated words. It’s strange though, because it usually takes her two or more hours ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: David and Dante Chapter 3: Fighting With Demons
There's the usual grammar/nit picky mistakes that can totally be found if you reread. Now,for some character relationships. Please, correct if I get anything wrong. David and Dante are brothers, ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: Chapter One part one and two
If you were to walk into fourteen year-old Stephanie Sheppard’s room, you wouldn’t notice anything different. You would still see her blue walls and white carpet, her bed with the ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: BloodLust - Prologue & Chapter 1 Part 1 [Edited]
BloodLust Prologue The stars were all that glistened in the sheet of darkness that prevailed above the wildlife surrounding the man. He made his way through the forest, disturbed by ...
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Re: Ticking Heart, Beating Clock
Sweet sadist, the alarm clock that beats inside my heart Ticks away the minutes until we meet once more No sleeping pill, no shield of eyes would hold my slumber ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: The Dark Prison
Dear Lucy, My heart aches whenever I think about you. I know I will see you soon, but it just seems so far away. It isn’t so bad over here, ...
Aug 17, 2010 -
Re: Crimson Lullaby Chapter One
Chapter One You are the only Exception The Lesson was going well. Well I'm sure the teacher thought it was going well, no one was loud, nothing was thrown and ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: David and Dante Chapter 2: Toast
Toast “If anyone else tries to breakdown that door they will.” Dante said worryingly. He examined the splintered wood barely supporting the chain. “What do we do with the body?” ...
Aug 16, 2010 -
Re: Fixed At Zero [Chapter 5 - Draft]
“Jerry… how do you think she’s coping with the… situation?” Mom’s voice floats up the stairwell. I creep next to the stairs and strain to listen. I’m supposed to be ...
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Re: David and Dante Chapter 1 - Meeting the Medici
Meeting the Medici David entered the fully furnished mansion carrying his sedated brother in both arms. He used his back to push the armoured front door shut before gently placing ...
Aug 16, 2010
