Kinsley

I also liked this poem a lot and I feel that it can really relate other kids who are your age at the time you wrote this. Aside from the ...

I loved the last stanza th best, particularly the last line. I don't know how to describe what I feel about it but I love it. Ingenious. Maybe I'm just ...

I've read the trilogy and if you do, it will all make sense. the community in the second book ties to the thrid and the thrid ties to the first. ...

Haha, this was an awesome poem. Very cute, and the rythm really drew my attention. I don't know of a title, maybe Baseball? That's all I can think of. :) ...

I disagree with people saying that it didn't flow because of rhyming. BUT It seems too obvious in the second stanza. And in the last stanza you use 'sorrow' which ...

Honestly, I really didn't understand this poem. (Although, I'm assuming it's about friends who stay together forever?) But that's okay. You don't have to modify YOUR poem so that it ...

First of all, welcome to YWS, Futurestar! I hope you have fun here and you learn to become a better writer. Remeber to give others honest and helpful critiques. Later, ...

Wow. It's heard to explain what I feel. My brain doesn't really understand the poem very well but my heart has been deeply affected somehow. I really like it and ...

“You don’t remember your name do you." You need a question mark at the end. I agree. It is a good idea but the point of view is confusing. The ...

VERY CREEPY!!! I hope that's what you were going for. :) Yuck, eating the bird's...I can't even finish the sentence. Very interesting too. Seeing as I haven't read the first ...