KimberleeP

Review Just here to give some friendly editing advice! :) Original Chris smiled with her dark purple lips, and walked in. Daniel closed the door and followed Chris to the ...

Review Just thought that I would give some friendly editing advice for the introduction of the chapter, and for the ending of the chapter. :) Original The empty glass stained ...

Just read chapter one, heading to chapter two! Review I thought that this story was very in depth with detail; perhaps to the point of over-saturation. However, it was a ...

I really like this! It's very unique! Review I saw the recent posts, and decided to start from the beginning. I don't regret it one bit. :) I have some ...

Review I felt like this lacks research and time. You may want to look up more sources to support what you are claiming. Original On a daily basis, phone companies ...

Hello! I just want to say that I saw your recently published parts, but wanted to start from part one. It's so good! I can't wait to read the rest! ...

I'm hoping for another chapter! Review I would enjoy more detailing. Describe the emotions, tensions, or thoughts more vividly. I love your style of writing, and I think it has ...

I hope more is coming soon! Review I found this piece a little long. I know the length can be as long as the author wants, but I would recommend ...

I'm glad to see chapter two! Review I noticed the wall of text at the beginning, but that's okay! I have advice on how to clear it up. By the ...

This was a beautiful concept, and I'm really into this. I hope to see more in the future! Review Compliments & Encouragement The emotional impact after reading this: “Daddy! Daddy! ...