Kim

wow bear, did not know you wrote poetry to. is there nothing you cant do? this is great, i loved it. kim

this was great. the vivid imagery was awesome. i did get confused on the rape part also. but once i reread it i understood alittle better. awesome job. kim

wow this was great. i loved the discriptions. very well done. kim

i am not sure what the subject was, or where it was going. the words used are beautiful. and it is well written. i just honestly did not know what ...

wow, this had a hard impact. no emotion held back. i loved this. and so very true. i love reading your work. kim

this is very good, it was easy to read and flowed. the emotion was put out there. great job. kim

wow, alot of emotion packed in a small piece. this is very good. the only part that confused me was the street canary. but it has its place. so i ...

i really enjoyed the discriptions you used. i was able to mentally image them. it made hope the two get together. one will be very cherished. i liked it. kim

short and sweet, i like it. kim

again, you wrote an awesome chapter. keep going bear. this is going to be a great book. kim

lol bear, it is still a secret about christian, although i have dropped hints in previous chapters. i should define the demons more. but i have a hard time giving ...

this is beautiful. your discriptions were very vivid. it is well written. although i do not write poetry, and can not really critique any errors. i found that your poem ...

you packed alot of thought with few words. i liked it, it has an impact. kim

your poem is very sad. i could feel the her/him give up. you showed that giving up is never good. i am glad it ended the way it did, it ...

i really like the third and fourth paragraph, although the first two were pretty good. but the emotion you put out in the last two was awesome. i wouldnt worry, ...