Kaylyn

This story is the worst I've ever wrote. I personally don't like it, but am reluctant to delete a story. Thanks for the crits though.

Your's is so much better than mine. How could you say otherwise, this was great. I personally love and prefer poems that ryhme.

This isn't a poem. Please post this somewhere else. I don't find this funny. And if you going to post something in the poetry section, make it a poem. Not ...

I think that this could be a great story. It just seems a little cliche at this beginning. Make it your own, blow the other writers out of the water. ...

Great poem. I haven't seen one this good in a while. Its nice to see something different. Personally, I like rhyming poetry, and I found this fantastic. Your grammar was ...

Thanks for all the positive crits! I dont get those very much in poetry. :) What? Galerius, you didn't tear my work apart at all this time.... ITs like there ...

I can't wait, I get Evernight today!

I'm new at poetry, anit can be annoying I know that it can be annoying to read. They are all in the poetry section. But...I couldn't resist. This isn't my ...

Wait, where did I have though in the poem?

Galerius, all I can say is thanks. You were a part of my inspiration. But no its not all about you. My competitive nature kicked in. :) Thanks for all ...

Well, at first it was. But then I wanted to make it a bit comedic.

Awesome revision. You have done a great job editing this story, it has come a long way since the original. It lost a lkittle of its comedy, but most of ...

Oh, okay I meant that you do a lot of showing instead of telling. Telling: She had shiny hair. She was wearing a yellow dress. She had a great personality. ...

Yes, I agree, it would look alot better longer. Describe some beliefs. You had great grammar and I liked the poem. Its quite true. Good luck and keep writing.

Thanks!