KayKel16

I was desperately trying not to think about what was going to take place in the next few minuets but failing miserably, what can I say?! This is probably a ...

A thin smile cam to the man’s lips as he pulled out a small handgun out of his jacket and opened fire, bullets sparking of the dirty, concrete walls. This ...

He quickly realised that he wasn’t in fact going to the seventh floor, so turning to the lady with a smile that she missed, he pressed, or at least thought ...

Hey there, I'm gonna try and be your reviewer! Dun, dun, dun. Anyways! Lou Myers was dangerous. He was a drug supplyer , a weapon supplyer , a kidnapper , ...

I'll be somewhat of your reviewer. All the students, faculty and janitors had left the high school before anything happened to Jake’s notebook and pencil. You are giving a series ...

She answered in french, "No." French should be captilized, it was probably just a typo. Just pointing it out for you (: The cabi stopped the horses, "italiano, hey, Jack?" ...

“If you fall and break your neck, mother will shot me,” Isabelle protested. I'm sure this is just a typo, but shot should be shoot. But Savannah couldn’t hear the ...

Hi! (: I'm going to review you work, but don't just listen to me wait for some people who actually know what they're doing! Please and thank you...Lol. Apparently her ...

James looked at me with his usual handsome smile and said with a sweeping bow and a very cheesy voice I would seperate the part that desribes his actions, maybe ...

This sounds really good, but I have some suggestions. Yesterday was my most recent hunt. He had no idea it was coming. I wouldn't keep the period there, maybe a ...

A soft, silent whimper touched the edges of her swollen lips. Tear marks stained her fragile face, and a sticky, salty sweat stretched across her cheeks. She opened her mouth ...

I really like this story! I have some suggestions though, not many. "Shut up." I think. "Shut up. Remember, the only reason you went out with him is to find ...

This is an amazingly emotional story, you're really good at telling stories fiction or non-fiction. The only thing review wise that I have to tell about would be: The day ...

from the new age of four to the very recent past I had enough crap thrown at me to star in my own soap opera. Okay, this was probably just ...

Alright - now I got that figured out. I really like like your writing. But the first setence doesn't make sense, is it supposed to be 'What makes you think?' ...