KatTrain

A white lined paper, holes and date on the top, usually they don't use lined paper? vital signs and temperature, blood pressure Is my name there? Do you know who ...

I have something to confess cliche But my words, they're all bought So, listen what I'm going to say take out the comma Like I'm about to die This line ...

"Heart-shaped paper scissor cut Laced with red trim" I know you say you use phrases but there are too choppy, even for your style. They don't make much sense together, ...

I lovedd this! So sincere, romantic, and descriptive. I love how you explain that he really is better then you. It's something people can connect with. "you'll feel the rush ...

It's a good idea. This is supposed to flow like someone's actual thoughts (and I like that), I know. But it still seems too choppy for poetry. 'Mean' on the ...

Encased in a nightmare I hide behind my hands I like Waiting for it to disappear Waiting for it to Disperse this is awkward all alone The mirror is my ...

I'm counting down the best years of my life with empty beer bottles I like and blood soaked packs of cigarettes, You should've elaborated on this smoke sinking into my ...

Books litter the floor The swivel chair is piled high with junk this line is too long Right beside the door A calendar, old All sorts of clothes to fold ...

The day the sky falls down I’ll forget you. The day the sky falls down I’ll want you more. These lines don't sound poetic The day the sky falls down ...

Swaying on the broken wind , I feel like I'm never content. What to say, what to make, and why? 'what to make' sounds awkward What to do with my ...

Eyes have fooled the heart before with many curious glances; the glances lead to hearts in mouths a bit choppy and flaming fast romances. Nice intro So quick’s the eye ...

Great Ideas and contrast. The difference between an innocent girl and the player... "You wave to tell me goodbye." Seems like that's normal, a player would wave to force a ...

I watch my dog from my porch, She stalks slowly through the grass. She stops and watches as I walk from porch. She changes direction and is now stalking me, ...

A knife wedged in a wedding cake is a realist view of the world. very clever stanza Love is a silly little fantasy, dreamed up by little girls. i can ...

Christmas with A Mad Old Man Snowflakes falling Lights are blinking The old man sits there Alone and thinking Buttoning her coat She stops to stare The old man smiles ...