KandjaKabamba

All in all I like the poem. The rhythm does need a bit of work. I really like the creative use of grammar and punctuation to accentuate the imagery. The ...

Heya, The imagery is clear and easy to picture. I do not think that the flow is lacking although punctuation would help with where you are beginning and ending your ...

I do love the mixture of syntactical style used. The flow of the sentences is very original. Although I do think that the introduction could have more information. The grammar ...