Kale

draw me a grave on the stained ground ; put me to rest without a doubt and leave me be. Nice, strong first stanza. The comma isn't grammatically correct, and ...

You proved me damn wrong! Lauren's already pointed out most of the other things I wanted to. This story was sweet, and it made me smile while I was reading ...

Concerning your title, "proudness"? I don't believe that's a word. Also, "plays" is misspelled. Right from the first stanza, it seems to me that you forced yourself to rhyme. While ...

Every place on this earth overrun with violence. Personally, I would have broken the line at either "earth" or "overrun". I think it sounds and flows better. Blood flows , ...

Thanks for your reviews on The Fox and the Prince. First thing: I'm wondering why you chose to right-align this poem. It's rather unusual, and I don't see a clear ...

I'm afraid I have to agree wholeheartedly with Maddy. There's nothing original or unique to this story. Now, while cliche isn't bad in and of itself, it must be paired ...

To put it bluntly, this chapter bored me. Why would they tell Zoe she had the power to bring about her father's downfall? Why would they tell her anything? Why ...

And here come the last three reviews! Better late than never? >.> I knew it for the past week, that there's something mystical about the voice in my head and ...

Stella has already covered most of what I wanted to say (especially concerning tenses and characterization), so I'll just be focusing on the pacing. The start of the chapter had ...

Alrighty! Here's the first of the reviews I've promised you. Sorry it's taken so long. I have finals. >.> The first thing I notice is that your punctuation is less ...

As the waves turned on the surface of the water, it reminded him of a breeze flowing through the wheat fields of his village. I like this comparison. There was ...

And when they jeer and shout Just punch them out The second line is just so short, it sounds off, and it makes the rhyme sound forced, too. Overall, I ...

I liked how you used parentheses. They were a nice touch, though the periods inside them were unnecessary. Also, in the beginning, I'm not sure how the words in parentheses ...

searching for a lover to hunt and find. "Hunt and find" strikes me as a bit redundant. I would suggest cutting it down just to "find". The rhyme scheme struck ...

There were a lot of forced rhymes that, to be blunt, made these lyrics even cheesier than than the cliche phrases that make up this entire song. Basically, the impression ...