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There were a couple issues with this. First off, punctuation. You use a lot of semicolons, and not all of those semicolons are properly used. Semicolons connect two independent clauses, ...

Bluntness time. I liked the content. I didn't like the presentation. This is something that's been bugging me for a while about your writing, actually, and it isn't limited to ...

I was thinking just the other day that I missed your poetry, and then I saw this and was like, "omgyaymustread!" only, when I did, I found myself not liking ...

Since you've already had several reviews, especially TL G-Wooster's, that have covered most of what I wanted to say, I have only three words left: Typo. In. Title. *twitch* One ...

I was trying to be funny, and at the same time make some valid points for the two users who posted the things I linked at the end. I also ...

On a side note, when you want to include an author's note, it's better to include it at the beginning/end of the piece rather than in a separate post. When ...

The box of matches is weathered; two years old at the most. The semicolon is inappropriate here. Semicolons connect two independent clauses; the second half of this sentence is a ...

Hello there. I will be reviewing you this lovely Review Day. :D That said, I haven't read the previous chapters, so if I bring up a point that was addressed ...

Hello there. I will be reviewing you this lovely Review Day. :D That said, I haven't read the previous chapters, so if I bring up a point that was addressed ...

You did a pretty good job on the introductory summary. It's concise and yet intriguing, though you have a case of homophone confusion and some awkward wording that could use ...

This chapter moved far too fast, and there are crucial details missing. They were running, but then they had time to stop to treat the narrator's wound? Since when? At ...

Rejoice for it is Review Day, and here I am to do some reviewing. With that said, I haven't read the previous chapters, so if I bring up a point ...

Hello there. I will be reviewing you this lovely Review Day. That said, I haven't read the previous chapter, so if I bring up a point that was addressed in ...

Hello there. I will be reviewing you this lovely Review Day. :D That said, I haven't read the previous chapters, so if I bring up a point that was addressed ...

There were a number of misspelled words scattered throughout. Proofreading more carefully in the future should take care of the spelling errors. In addition, you had massive paragraphs that could ...