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  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Tiger by the tail

    It's difficult to take this review seriously as a review for several reasons. First, and most importantly, this is all opinion-based. You really don't give us examples from the movie ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: An Amalgamation

    Personally, I felt like you took a thesaurus and tried to write a piece with as many uncommon words simply because those words were uncommon and not because they were ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: My biggest regret

    Reading through this, I was left wondering if you wrote this as a school assignment. A lot of the sentences, especially "Well, I do not know that someone, but perhaps ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Flowers.

    This was very blunt. Now, there's nothing wrong with blunt, and I can appreciate and/or enjoy it, and goodness knows I tend to employ it heavily myself since it makes ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: I am The Hunter (Edited and *Cross fingers* Better)

    This could be really great, however, there are a couple of issues that prevent it from being so. Some of it has to do with formatting. Right in the middle, ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Other » General, General Re: Doppelgangers

    This was quite interesting, and I like how you approached it descriptively rather than analytically. It makes for more compelling reading. Unfortunately, I felt that things fell apart right at ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Script » General, General Re: Before I Knock....

    I'm surprised at how short this is. In fact, I think it could use a bit of lengthening, particularly at the end. You do a good job voicing the doubts, ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Faith (An Except)

    You had me gripped from the first paragraph, and while there were a couple of details that made me stop to look at them a little closer (like the mention ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Beauty and the Beast part 3

    I haven't read the first two parts, but after reading this, I think I just might. I'm a huge sucker for fairytales and Classical mythology, and I see here that ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Go With the Flow

    I only really have one comment about this piece, and it has to do with the ending. You mentioned remembering the same thing being done to Laura Ingalls Wilder by ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: meen peeple

    Hello there, spazz. I'll be reviewing you this fine day. Be prepared. First off, I'd like to mention your spelling and punctuation. Right now, both are rather terrible, to put ...

    Oct 16, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Letting Go

    Consider this a courtesy of Zombies! ;P And ancientforever has given you quite the thorough review there. I agree with everything she has already pointed out, though I still have ...

    Oct 9, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Human Invention as seen through the Eyes of F**k

    For all your insistence upon your proficiency in writing, your punctuation in particular displays a lack of poetic consideration. Grammatical acceptability aside, your punctuation more often than not

    Oct 2, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Time, Time, Time.

    I think, deep in your heart of hearts (or maybe not so deep if the Author's Note is any indication), you know this isn't great, or even good, poetry. Let's ...

    Sep 30, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Celeb Dream

    I will say before I even begin that the subject squicks me. Squicks me like all unholy hell. That said, the only reason I can see this being called a ...

    Sep 25, 2011


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