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This read more like a list than a poem, and to be honest, I'm struggling to find anything about it that could be considered poetic or even story-like. All I ...

This is a very interesting format for a chapter. Since it seems to be a poem, I'll be reviewing it as such. The first thing you might want to do ...

First impression: Wow. Long. But once I started reading, I was hooked. You might want to consider breaking this up into parts so that it's more manageable for readers. Anything ...

Hello there. Just dropping in to leave a review since it's always so sad when works go under-reviewed. Before I start, I just want to mention that I haven't read ...

First impression: those are some rather massive paragraphs. Can you break them up a little? It would make it easier to read. The general rule of thumb for paragraphing is ...

Here as requested to review! The first thing I have to say is nice formatting. The divider images are a very nice touch. But when I’m King, you’ll know where ...

As Crow above me already mentioned, there were quite a lot of grammar mistakes, such as the one in "Her loves messing in her lab and reading." That said, between ...

The premise is interesting enough, and there is definitely potential here, but the execution is in dire need of work. The main issue is the pacing. Up until about the ...

You have ideas here, but that's all they are: ideas. There is no development of these ideas to distinguish them as your ideas rather than someone else's. One way to ...

This piece was so heavily laden with description, it felt choked. Now, having a lot of description isn't necessarily bad, but in this case, a lot of the description was ...

the kind of place that uprising musicians go to play I do not think that word means what you think it means. "Uprising" is synonymous with "rioting" and "revolting", and ...

Our savage souls is not to be forgave This line doesn't make sense. The proper tense is "forgiven", but even correcting that, it's just weird-sounding. I'd suggest rewording entirely. "Our ...

Hello there. I haven't read the previous parts, but hopefully I can still be of help. Overall, this is pretty solidly written. My only real quibbles are with the punctuation ...

18:00, Thursday @ Shaw Boulevard, Tablado boys decided to have their 'first boys' night out' in Manila. As usual, J.J. couldn’t come with them for some excuses, I mean reasons. ...

Before I begin the review proper, I'd just like to point out that parodies need not be outright funny. They often are, but they do not always need to be ...