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You did nothing wrong Little errors like this, combined with the lack of consistent punctuation, really hurt your poem. As it stands, I really didn't feel anything from it. It ...

I only saw a River of Tears. That title drop is so painful... so, so painful... Title drops work best when they are subtle. The italics and capitalization are really ...

That's my favorite site for everything English grammar-related, and it also has information on how to cite sources and such. That said, TwistedMuffins already covered the punctuation, so I'll just ...

Before I go into specifics, the first thing I'd like to mention is the formatting. I'm not sure why you broke this poem up into two-line stanzas, but it struck ...

Like craz33me, I'm wondering if you intended this poem to be formatted this way, or if the text editor ate your line breaks. If you did intend this poem to ...

The first thing I noticed straight-off: the capitalization of your lines is inconsistent. Sometimes you capitalize; sometimes you don't. How you present your poem has a considerable impact on how ...

That title! I am in love with that title! Truly, it is a most marvelous title. Unfortunately, the poem itself fails to live up to the insane expectations such a ...

In battle of Camblam- The last and greatest of our King- Two things — "Camblam" is more commonly written as "Camlann", so the latter spelling would be more immediately recognizeable. ...

My Spanish is quite rusty, but from what I understood, this poem was lovely. The language struck me as being a bit simple at times, but the simplicity is what ...

Behold! For this is a review which is not a review! It is rather difficult to review something which is no longer present. I expect that if I were to ...

This is a not-review totally masquerading as a review seeing as how there's kinda... nothing... here to really review. Which makes me sad, because the title is totally AWESOME. It ...

I'm seconding everything Lumi said, especially with respects to the firm foundation and flow issues. There's a genuineness, a genuineness that's quite brutal at times, to this poem that makes ...

This was beautiful. I honestly have nothing to critique (which is very rare), aside from complaining that this section was far too short. And it's really not so much a ...

Hey there. As shiney already mentioned, the bold and large size of the font make this not very nice-looking, and it's distracting to your readers. How a poem appears is ...

Hey there. Since bexy was so thorough on the spelling and grammar, I won't be mentioning anything about them, except to say that proofreading is always a good idea. Most ...