Kafkaescence

I must agree with Jojo on the showing, not telling critique. You don't give any clear imagery, and though you somewhat give examples of feeling, most of it is pretty ...

Hey Spire! Here is your review, as promised. I wonder who I am... I'm not sure I particularly like the ellipses here or on the following line. Only in very, ...

Prepare for a harsh review. I'm sorry, but this has no rhythm. The lines are much too long and the words hardly complement each other. In addition to this, each ...

This is a very interesting poem. You effortlessly develop the feeling of the poem. One thing I am not sure I like, however, is the rhyming pattern. When a poem ...

Agh! Stop! I'm on the verge of tears! Seriously, though. This is really good: very emotional, very touching, very...well, here are my critiques. Just some punctuation issues I found along ...

Nice work. What I am seeing right now is a person who is being forced by some incorporeal, or else psychokinetic, "enemy" of his. The person then defies the enemy, ...

Watching my feet and being careful not to step on dry piles of leaves, I slipped silently through the unfenced backyards of quiet houses. The houses were, in all truth, ...

This is great. It is not original, but I like the suspense you build along the way. Your style possesses voice. And voice is a difficult thing for many writers ...

This really is a beautiful poem. I loved reading it - especially near the end. The very last line was most enviable. Here are some quibbles of mine: He said, ...

Hey! I started this a while ago, and decided I might as well post this in hope of some reviews so it isn't so crappy. Anyway, I hope you like ...

This is a very interesting piece. I love science fiction stories like the one that this prologue is suggestive of - ones that make one question the ideals of the ...

I am very glad to have come across this. You have a beautiful writing style - almost poetic, but just enough so that it can still be considered a short ...

I liked, if not loved, this poem. You have a good rhythm, a good idea, and good imagery. Here are my critiques: you’re tracing thoughts into the lines of my ...

I like this poem. I like it a lot. You have a voice - a voice that you maintain throughout the piece. It was this - the voice - that ...

You are a very good poet. I loved the metaphors, I loved the story interwoven with the metaphysicalness of the more emotional statements. This piece was beautifully crafted. Here is ...