Kafkaescence

Here I am. I have to leave-- the house suffocates me, almost like a living being trying This last part is weird - it makes sense, but the three words ...

Meh. So. There's something that this poem needs badly. Rhythm. The lines simply do not flow into one another. They connect, meaning-wise, but the sound of the lines themselves seem ...

Staring at the blinking cursor, My mind begins to play it’s game, Doesn't flow well with the last line. Seems detached. Also, "it's" should be "its." Thoughts swell and my ...

Okay. So, my main problem with this is the repetition. It works in some cases, but you repeat the whole "remember" thing so much that it loses much of its ...

Immortal wings on hence thy fly, I don't even get how you thought "hence" was the right word here. "Hence" is not in the slightest a synonym of "which." Change ...

I almost feel bad now. Almost. Because everyone else gave such applauding reviews, while mine is going to be all critique. Let's start off with the main, obvious problem with ...

I be here for review #2. Sooo. This'll be pretty short. I'll skip right into the critique. My main problem is that the narrator simply isn't being fierce enough with ...

As promised! With hidden thoughts and emotions, we cry Though no one bothers to ask why. Meh. This line serves no purpose, other than to waste space. We hide inside ...

He wiped his brow as sweat dribbled down his forehead. The air was humid and sticky. He was lounging out on the front porch steps, listening to his grandfather’s old ...

This was enjoyable. I really love this kind of poetry, how unique and creative it is. And it's not easy to produce a good poem with this style. But you ...

This magnificent land we call our earth, The one we failed to care for from birth. No, it was only recently that we started really not caring for it. This ...

light leaving the windows Meh. No particularly spectacular imagery here. Pretty bland. door swinging shut Maybe if you thought of an alternative for "swinging," I'd like this. As it is, ...

Trying to break my own knife, and failing to dust my lost pen. Exact same structure as the last line. To write this pain, that's so hard to swallow, What? ...

Is it because... Is it because of what I wear or is it because of my stringy hair? Meh. Is it because of my rosy cheeks Using lots of adjectives. ...

Firstly, I'd like to say that, as opposed to the last reviewer's corrections, it's perfectly fine to not capitalize anything. Just thought I'd throw that out there. while others sleep ...