Kafkaescence

At this point, I'm not sure whether to compare your story to Cinderella or My Side of the Mountain. You're going to have to choose. I have absolutely no idea ...

Kyllorac! I don't believe we've been properly introduced. This is a cute start to a story, but there are some issues that I think would be worth pointing out. I'll ...

Hello, onceuponatim3xo! I believe we've been acquainted. This is a nice start to a story. Above all, it is your ability to create characters, to develop linguistic entities so deliciously ...

This seems to be a different style from what you usually do. I can definitely see a bit of Kamas and MMM in this, and I'm glad you're exploring some ...

Uh, yeah. Firstly, this is not a prologue. Or, at least, should not be labeled as one. Character development, story development, and all that good stuff happens while the actual ...

Hullo. I. In our railroad novel, we break between the blasts of rattling carraiges, turning our eyes to the stars, warped by old, scratched plastic windows. We fall into the ...

Realized I had this stored away in my drafts, and figured I might as well post it as is. Sorry that it's a bit unfinished. Have you ever been down ...

Finally got to this. Okay. Under oaken arms, we can't help but bend and break; and so here, right now, we fall into hoarseness and frustration, crying out "we don't ...

Eesh. Hopefully there was no rush to this. To be honest, I found this a bit...cluttered. You have an interesting idea in mind, but it is unnecessarily difficult to grasp ...

Wazzup. Corrections/my comments will be in red. Monday, April 26, 1999 Dear Hannah, Your father sent me pictures of you from the Passover Seder, and I can not cannot believe ...

Well, I'm here. Told you it might take a while. Well, this was...interesting, I suppose. I've never really been a fan of prose that is stuffed to the tearing point ...

Hullo! Kafka here! ...I'm late. Really late. Oh, well. Here goes. Behind the cloud of dreams. Don't think you want a period here. Isn't really grammatically correct, and kills the ...

Here I am, finally. Corrections are in red. "What's with you and these crazy ideas?" "Haha, you're like some sort of fairy tale!" "Calm down! Stop twirling around every which ...

Whoa. I really could've sworn I took care of this review a long time ago, but it seems I neglected to. I hope you accept my full apology. Anyway, let's ...

Aaaaand I'm back. Hi. Okay, this won't be long, I hope. I'll start off with the praise. Without a doubt, the most powerful aspect of this piece is the narrator's ...