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Re: I am planning to send this to two of my most loved! Review!
Hey Smexay, KD here! I found this nice and sweet. But I have a question: Is it only for them? Because if the answer is yes, then I think this ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Goodbye, Ryan: My First Love
Hey PandyBear, I'm KD and I'll be your reviewer today! You did a great job with this. Nitpicks: “Sam what’s wrong?” he looks at me with question marks in his ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Perfect Angel - Prologue and part of Chapter One
Hey, KD here to review. First off, welcome to YWS. I love the prologue. The simplicity of it makes it so interesting. And it makes you think. What can flowers ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: The day YWS stood still.
Cute. :D Awesome idea, it's time that someone turned the YWS road trip idea into a story. The only way to make this awesome story awesomer is to add me ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Whispers ..... Chapter 1
Hey I'm KD, and I'll be your reviewer today. Today I'm just going to do an overall review for this. Things I Like/Things You Did Well On: -The dream. It's ...
Apr 10, 2010 -
Re: Can You See Me? (Chapter Two ~ Part two)
Hey Skins! I'm back to review part two of the latest chapter. Things I Like/Things You Did Well On: -I like how you don't state exactly what happened until the ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: The Assassin's Redemption Chapter 1 - Rewritten Once More!
KD here to review! In here you have great imagery, that's the thing I can applaud you the most for. Nitpicks: even though the sound of their tin boots and ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: The Greatest Matchmaking Challenge Ever: Ch.3 (review!)
Esther! I'm glad you put up chapter three quickly. There seem to be ongoing tense problems in here. That's my biggest correction for you. Otherwise, overall, good job. By the ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: Rain, Summer,and Ice Cream: Chapter One
Aghhh!!! It's a reviewer's nightmare to come across a piece like this with one block of text (as the others already pointed out). Please fix soon, 'kay? :wink: But even ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: The Greatest Matchmaking Challenge Ever: Ch. 2
Hiya Esther, KD's back again! Kay. I think it's so cool that you ended both chapters in a similar way: Chapter One: "What? And ruin my fun?" Chapter Two: "What? ...
Apr 8, 2010 -
Re: Us Pirates We're Hardcore ( a Tik Tok by Ke$ha parody)
Lol, this was brilliant! It would be even cooler if you made the lyrics written in the way a pirate would sing it, but...this was awesome. Some lines don't flow ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: The Ghost In My Bedroom
Hey, KD here to review! Here's the only nitpick I could find: "Never!" I yell. Silence is thrown on me. 'Corey, Corey,' It whispers again. Since there was a moment ...
Apr 7, 2010 -
Re: What Heroes Are Made Of - Chap1/Part1 - Edit
Hey, KD here to review the requested. :arrow: The Skating Scene: You did a great job. You described skateboarding in a way that even people who have never tried it ...
Apr 6, 2010 -
Re: The Greatest Matchmaking Challenge Ever.
Hey Esther. It's KD, here to review your piece today! This was cute, fun, and entertaining. A classic matchmaking story between nobles! (Well sometimes, it turns out differently than that.) ...
Apr 6, 2010 -
Re: Can You See Me? (Chapter Two)
Sorry, I have no critiques for you. (Well, except for the one that Knightley pointed out.) Because... Wow! This was great! :D This totally deserves to be featured. I'm glad ...
Apr 6, 2010