Kadie

From what I've read here you have an interesting story line and I would definitely be interested in reading more of this story, however there are a few things that ...

I actually really liked this book. I'll admit, it's cerainly not Meg's best book, but it was still a fun read that left me smiling in the end :P It ...

I closed my eyes, breathing in her scent, relishing in the feel of her pressed against me. This sentence sounds kind of wierd to me when i read it. I ...

This was awesome. It was just so gritty and dirty and real and i loved it. I'm all for unconditional love and happy endings and all that fluffy stuff, but ...

That was hot hehe :p No really, great peice of writing there. You presented the contradicting thoughts and feelings very well i think and the description was awesome. I didn't ...

Good start to the story. I agree, i think it should just start with her walking through the park rather than the little introduction part. And i'm glad that you ...

It seems a little rough, you should read through it once or twice before posting to try and catch those simple mistakes ( e.g. 'sleepless night after the they were' ...

I think it was really sweet, but it could probably use a little more description. I completely get the thing with the mom, my mom is the same. When we're ...

This is incredibly cliche, i pretty much have an idea of how it's going to end already. But still, some of the best stories are cliche, so maybe you'll pull ...

This is really beautiful and really sad. I loved the repetition in this piece, it just brings the whole thing together for me at the end when it says 'It's ...

Ok, i didn't read it all. The short sentences and lack of description kinda put me off. Also, there were quite a few spelling mistakes. You spelled 'Prologue' wrong, and ...

Just a couple of small things that i found. She could see the beach from her bedroom window, she'd often sit out on the balcony at night reminiscing on long ...

I don't think the characters are mature enough to pull off this story line, i mean, how old are they? Ninth grade is like 14, 15 year old right? At ...

Yeah, you need to double space your paragraphs. Big chunks of text can be off putting, if you double space you're more likely to get reviews. was pushing her was ...

Is this a first hand experience? Your name's Kelly, right? And the title kinda suggest's that it actually happened. If this was a peice based on real life, then i'm ...