KJ

It was okay. My favorite part of this whole thing was Awen's cigarette and how you placed it in the story. It was extremely reflective of her character, I felt, ...

I liked it. I wasn't bored, so that's a plus. The only part I really didn't like was when she thought that the boys only liked her for her body ...

Everyone else has got all the grammar errors down, so I won't bother. In general, I thought it was interesting. The first line grabbed my attention. But to be honest, ...

This was... great. Great hook, great dialogue, great description, everything. It held my attention and for once I wasn't bored. I love these kind of stories. I eagerly await for ...

Wow, this was really short. It might have eventually caught my attention if there'd been more. As far as hooks go that wasn't too great, to be honest. There wasn't ...

“You know I can't give you any ale. Your Pa would have my neck.” Mike said smiling. Mike was a big muscular man with a kind heart and a good ...

I really like your characters and how they develop in so short a time. The descriptions are great (I'm kind of jealous), and I could get into the story. The ...

I was not definitely not bored, and that's saying something. This has a ton of potential. But one thing I would've liked to be different is how you began the ...

Hey. I really liked this, which for me is saying a lot (I'm very picky). Your plot, what we saw of it, was good and attention-grabbing. The repetition thing does ...

Hi. I think you did a pretty good job of hooking the reader, and this was, in general, well-written. Couple things, though. Swift footsteps came towards the door of the ...

Hey. I was just wondering, since you used that name Crissiphone before, is this the same story as that Mount Olympus one? Or are you starting a new story and ...

Hi. Thought it was interesting, but it isn't something I would normally read. I was kind of forcing myself through it. I was confused at Crissiphone's first thoughts, because they ...

All in all, it's an interesting plot, and I was entertained by it, but I was distracted by all the grammar errors and the way you put your words in ...