KJ

I don't want to sound like a broken record, as all the others have already stated this, but your punctuation needs major work. It distracted me from the actual story. ...

Just a few things I noticed: The rain was soaking into his shoes. There were holes in the bottom, and if he wiggled his toe he could poke it through. ...

Hey. Again, not to be a broken record, your punctuation needs work. The writing was pretty good. It wouldn't have been bad if this was longer though. Not exactly sure ...

Hey. Your punctuation needs work again; you use periods instead of commas many times. As to the story - is that really how it happened? The whole blurting out about ...

That was extremely sad. I'm sorry that that happened. Someone close to me also experienced something like that. To refer to your writing, I noticed only a couple things: Your ...

Hey. I admit that I skimmed this, because I'm short of time. So I'll refrain from giving an official opinion until I I've read it throughly and completely. As to ...

Hey. Now I don't know if it's just the mood I'm in, but I found the beginning dull. I forced myself through a lot of it. Near the ending things ...

OK, I'm back, and I've been able to read it more thoroughly. First of all, JCobsesed is right - you need to take the time to correct your punctuation. This ...

Hey. I wasn't sure how I felt about this piece. No offense or anything, but I found myself bored. I didn't really understand the whole "mirrors" thing. You have some ...

Hello BFF. I'm glad you finally put this on here. I'm not going to do a full critique, considering that's already been covered, but I'll give you my basic opinion. ...

Hello. I have no time, but I wanted to tell you that I liked this. You have some good description. I didn't catch any errors in punctuation and grammar, but ...

Okay, I'm back. And once again, I'm very unhelpful and have nothing negative to say. The only thing that comes to mind, if I really am being utterly picky, is ...

Hey. Other than a few punctuation errors, I really found nothing. It was decently written, and an interesting start. But... am I supposed to know what's going on? Because at ...

Hey. I liked this. The only things that I didn't like was your spacing and I caught a few punctuation errors. I'm sure you can catch them if you go ...

Hello. Everyone pretty much has all the editing covered, but there were a couple things that I thought needed adjusting: “Well?” I said impatiently. It would seem that, after asking ...