Justagirl

but it is clear they still love each other. This should be: but it is clear they still love each other Whoa, I love the end of this poem: Are ...

What a wonderful piece!! I really like it and the picture at the end made quite a statement! ^.^ I didn't see any problems with it at all, it was ...

To My Best Friend : a nd now , the answer I want you to see. It ' s like living in a world without sunshine, ‘C c ause you ...

Lets say first that: I LOVE TO SKI!!! Alright, now on with the review. This was really well written, I loved reading it and enjoyed it a lot. I don't ...

I walk along an empty street , s hadows pass me by . Their souls my worries, fears , and doubts . Images brought to life . Love this stanza ...

This could have more a pop! at the ending... Something like: " So please, never give up. " Or: " So please, keep fighting and never give up. " I ...

A ring rose from sleepers who lurked in the lobes of the storehouse of starches -- like hungry hobos . T hey hitched a ride on a one-way train of ...

Where the desert rolls into the ocean a nd the midnight sun burns the back, w hen the bombs shriek by, their exhaust burning the air in hot song , ...

I was sitting next to my little sister, Penny, who had always found my sneezes hysterical; they were high-pitched and squeaky . A huge contrast from my voice which had ...

Why i despise you, You turn to me and ask with a sarcastic , evil smile that will never make me feel good inside " Why can't we be friends? ...

In the first two lines do you mean "is" not "it's"? In the third paragraph the first two lines seem like they're supposed to rhyme but they don't which throws ...

Yay!! The story is getting more interesting!! I'm pulled towards it like a moth to light... :D By the way, what is so bad about Luke being adopted? Keep writing, ...

I saw icicles harden. The thick , white sheet Nice poem!! I liked it. The way that you incorporated snow with other things... Good ;) Keep writing, Alzora

Subtract me from you and we get angry and depressed . W e know we belong together and can't be apart , we might be mad in our life time ...

My only nit-pick is the grammar. You have one comma. You need more!!! Other than that this poem is really awesome!!! I love it :D Keep writing, Alzora