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  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: The Lonely Roman

    Hey Ossie here! Great job on your work by the way. I loved the imagery of the sky being painted like a canvas. One thing you need to fix is ...

    Aug 28, 2016
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: The Republic of Thieves

    Wow! This is a really cool work! I like how you smoothly explained where the robbers originated from. However I did notice that you didn't show the reader what you ...

    Jul 3, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, General Re: The Lion Age #1: Hunted *Chp. 7*

    I really enjoyed the structure of your writing especially how you worked in te comments from the future. Your writing flows nicely and is easy to read and understand. I ...

    May 30, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Realistic Re: To the Dregs [Part I]

    I really enjoye your story and I think you wrote it really really well! There is not much that I would suggest fixing, I liked your drescriptions of things and ...

    May 14, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Mystery / Suspense Re: The Malicious Shadows ~ Prologue

    This is a really interesting work. I like how you began with an action to pull readers into your story, I could only notice a few things that need to ...

    May 4, 2016
  • Short Story » Dramatic, General Re: Leaving a Spark

    This is an awesome story! I wasn't expecting it to have a happy ending so I am really glad that it did. One thing you could fix is the tense ...

    May 3, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Realistic Re: old friends

    Hey! I enjoyed chatting with you so I thought I'd review your story. I really like the concept and how it opens with the con-artist being interrogated! One thing that ...

    May 3, 2016
  • Poetry » Politics, Realistic Re: Uprising

    Hi! The first thing I would like to say is that I absolutely love the way you wrote this! Your message made me really happy and hopeful for the future. ...

    May 2, 2016
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Health Re: the last things I need to say

    Wow this is really interesting! I like how you used a series of shorter sentences to make it seem more fast paced and sudden. You could touch up the grammar ...

    May 2, 2016
  • Novel / Chapter » Science Fiction, Action / Adventure Re: The Chaos Game, Chapters 1-3

    I really like the premise for your book! Your ideas are well formed and the work is funny and entertaining. You could double check the grammar and maybe get a ...

    May 1, 2016
  • Other » Other, Other Re: On Gender, Growing Up, and The Meaning Of Life

    I really like what you said and how you said it! I am also frustrated when people look at me and make the assumption that because I am a girl ...

    May 1, 2016


Il faut imaginer Sisyphe heureux (One must imagine Sisyphus happy).
— Albert Camus, The Myth of Sisyphus