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Re: The Lonely Roman
Hey Ossie here! Great job on your work by the way. I loved the imagery of the sky being painted like a canvas. One thing you need to fix is ...
Aug 28, 2016 -
Re: The Republic of Thieves
Wow! This is a really cool work! I like how you smoothly explained where the robbers originated from. However I did notice that you didn't show the reader what you ...
Jul 3, 2016 -
Re: The Lion Age #1: Hunted *Chp. 7*
I really enjoyed the structure of your writing especially how you worked in te comments from the future. Your writing flows nicely and is easy to read and understand. I ...
May 30, 2016 -
Re: To the Dregs [Part I]
I really enjoye your story and I think you wrote it really really well! There is not much that I would suggest fixing, I liked your drescriptions of things and ...
May 14, 2016 -
Re: The Malicious Shadows ~ Prologue
This is a really interesting work. I like how you began with an action to pull readers into your story, I could only notice a few things that need to ...
May 4, 2016 -
Re: Leaving a Spark
This is an awesome story! I wasn't expecting it to have a happy ending so I am really glad that it did. One thing you could fix is the tense ...
May 3, 2016 -
Re: old friends
Hey! I enjoyed chatting with you so I thought I'd review your story. I really like the concept and how it opens with the con-artist being interrogated! One thing that ...
May 3, 2016 -
Re: Uprising
Hi! The first thing I would like to say is that I absolutely love the way you wrote this! Your message made me really happy and hopeful for the future. ...
May 2, 2016 -
Re: the last things I need to say
Wow this is really interesting! I like how you used a series of shorter sentences to make it seem more fast paced and sudden. You could touch up the grammar ...
May 2, 2016 -
Re: The Chaos Game, Chapters 1-3
I really like the premise for your book! Your ideas are well formed and the work is funny and entertaining. You could double check the grammar and maybe get a ...
May 1, 2016 -
Re: On Gender, Growing Up, and The Meaning Of Life
I really like what you said and how you said it! I am also frustrated when people look at me and make the assumption that because I am a girl ...
May 1, 2016
