Juniper

Hello! I won't do a bit by bit critique here, but I'm just going to say that I thought you had a reasonable idea behind this, but I think you ...

Jon-- The main problem I am having with this poem is trying to fit my head around why you chose the wording you're working with here. I don't see the ...

Nesh!! Good to see you around. I had no indication that you were around or alive, or anything. :P (It's strange, because I was rereading yours letters last night and ...

Kylanesque! (I need more nicknames for you...) I keep meaning to review as soon as you post something, but I am a chief at procrastinating. This reminds me of cantelope, ...

Hey, you, They say that across the Damascan plains where lions sleep with dirty manes and wish to howl but for bitter tongues may only bite the sword that tames ...

Kamas! So! You should be afraid, because I am pretty merciless at the moment. You know, pain does odd things to one self... I was considering doing a brutal amputation ...

Hey Corwin, I'm not worth much in the world of lyrics; I can sing some of them and that's about it, sadly. I'm not really well at critiquing them, nor ...

Hey GeeBee, welcome to YWS! Her eyes wondered around the room. Wandered. She layed still in the bed, confused. Past tense of lay is laid, but here you need this ...

Kammieyaz-- Let's break this down: Forgotten sun-tiles -- on the red brick path they lay This, to put it bluntly, is distracting. See, the dash would indicate a break, and ...

Hullo, Kylan! Your opening paragraph is long. All of the information in it, as well as its precise wording (for the most part) all should stay, but you should probably ...

Hello, Gun! This was good! It's good to see more of your poetry around here. This reminded me of the The Swan Princess ballet-- and that probably sounds weird, but, ...

Helloooo there, Eddie! This is a fantastic step up from your usual poetry, and I love how you're improving. As far as technical things go in this, you have a ...

Hello, Katie! I'm June. Welcome to YWS! I sure hope you enjoy your stay here. In the future, it might be better to edit your original post and replace the ...

Hello, Corwin! Welcome to YWS! I'm June, and I'm going to review this for you. If I'm too harsh, just send me a PM or something and let me know. ...

Not bad, Pepper! Do I really seem like that in chat? Haha, fanfics that involve me always surprise me because I never really pay that much attention to how I ...