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Ashes

by Corwin


Ashes
By
Corwin Clampitt
When time starts shaking
N earth starts quaking
Don’t know where life’s taking me
Somewhere there’s a key
To this life’s mystery

Your words get duller
Didn't hear em at all or
Looking off the ledge
Prayin I don’t fall
An angel is calling
N lifts me up

When our eyes meant
Faint gestures quiet pleasures
Passion burnin N I wanna crank it up
So hot I wanna drop

Looking inward into a crystal ball
Start to tingle when shown what’s out there
The meaning of everything
Showin me places I’ve never been
Faces I haven’t yet seen
Seeing your future would you want to change it
Run away from it, complicate it

When time is torture
The temperature gets colder
Wish I had a hand to hold onto
That might keep me going
Expectations aimed high
Touching the gods, touching the sky

Was this intended
Don't tell me you pretended
With my fists you could be defended
Guess it’s harder with a heart that needs mending

When heart so broken, so outspoken
Begins to heal, start to feel
Is this real a dream not shattered
Didn't matter ‘cuz life’s full of laughter
Can’t hear through the clatter
A waterfall in my head


Passion is burning
N you stop turning
Ur not looking my way
You make me pay
Living with a curse everyday

Future is changing
Roses wilting, tensions got me squirming
These bombs start bursting
My head starts hurting

Reduced to ashes
Charcoals glowing
A new wind blowing
Destiny wasn’t showing
Where the fuck I was going

N I’m not plain
Clear cut but not simple
Rest of the story
I’m not simple just not that complex
So down to earth that I could never get hurt

N when I’m insulted
A voice inside says to stop it
Must be subconscious, kind of nauseous
The water is boiling
Not sure where I’m going
The tension is growing
See I won’t follow n I won’t wallow
When fate has caught up with me
N presents me with key
To unlock all the happy
Take away the angry
Make nothing scary anymore


Be sore be painful
Be more than I came for
See me coming n don't start running
Use love as chain, to keep me constrained
Make me ask for so much more
Not so much that I’m controlled
But I’ll be bold and admit it
The fight was worth the prize
To finally look you in the eyes
Show no lies
Not victimized
Silently socialize
Never go
Never go away

Wanna see you again
Been so many days
Forgot when it began when it ended
Destiny getting the best of me

Not offended, lil insulted
Felt a bit haunted
From memories that haven’t happened
Less on this end more on that end
Don't know where to pull
To get to her

Sitting in my truck
Dark as fuck
Cherry on my cigarette glowing
Ashes blowing out into the wind
Blew it somewhere I’ve never been
Don’t ever throw life away
Might be tomorrow or it might be today
When fate is coming your way
Thought I was blazing
Guess I was crazy
To think I could have you
Didn't know what I was doing
In the review mirror
Crystal clear but not in broad daylight
Ashes falling in midnight skies
A new day is dawning
Thought I heard you calling
Thought I was wrong
Turned out right
What’s going on, what a fucking mess
Looked around, nothing to see
Just restless and reckless
Thought I couldn't wreck this
In front of me, outa reach
Kind of a keeps sake
But for god’s sake
Take me with you


Cherry dying, the glow is dimming
Should fate be falling or am I just calling
Can’t out run destiny
So I’ll sit back
Engulfed into the black


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Fri Jan 01, 2010 4:06 pm
Juniper wrote a review...



Hey Corwin,

I'm not worth much in the world of lyrics; I can sing some of them and that's about it, sadly. I'm not really well at critiquing them, nor am I any good at writing them, so I'll just say...

Well done. For the most part you held consistent rhyme and rhythm, which is good. I'd say, though, not to force yourself in rhyme, because it forces some of the lines to not make sense, you know? If it can't rhyme, meter it, and all should be good. :)

Nonetheless, good lyrics; two thumbs up. You're pretty good.

June




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Fri Jan 01, 2010 12:53 pm
Corwin says...



Oh thanks very much glad you enjoyed it




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Thu Dec 31, 2009 12:23 pm
R3b3L wrote a review...



This is amazing, your rhyming skills are impressive. You worded everything perfectly in my opinion, and your structure is flawless.

"When time is torture

The temperature gets colder

Wish I had a hand to hold onto

That might keep me going

Expectations aimed high

Touching the gods, touching the sky"

My favorite part.


R3b3L





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