Junglelover

Hey screamandshout, I'll do my best! I never wanted to get up. I wanted to Die. I would put, I just wanted to die. But that's just my opinion. I’ll ...

Hey tam_ara, Here too review, just as you asked! :D “Evelyn, wake up! Damien chirped, opening her coffin and handing her her bottle of blood. She hissed at him, “Too ...

Hi there! I can tell you put a lot of work into this, but you have to put some time into checking your spelling. Also, ad some description. You could ...

InkHeart trilogy is awesome! I was so mad that Meggie went for Daria instead of Farid! I mean, come on! Farid can play with fire! He is so much more ...

Hello Solvalery! Just some nitpicks. "Could you tell me what are you laughing at? You forgot to put the quotation marks at the end. "Come on stop it... stop the ...

Hi Jackpot! It doesn't sound like a whole song. I don't know if i like how it keeps on say 'Don't you ever wonder why girl' or not. I can ...

Hi Arya. You're doing really good! :smt023 Just some nitpicks. I tried to control my shivering but I could stop I think you mean 'could not stop' But that wasn’t ...

Hello Bugwhisker, Your doing well with keeping the same words as Erin Hunter uses. “Who asked you?” Rabbitdash raised an eyebrow. I would put something like: said Rabbitdash slitting his/her ...

Hello Bugwhisker, You should explain why Eaglefeather hates the smell of SwiftClan. The gathering is kinda confusing because they are talking to lots of different cats. You should make a ...

Hi Bugwhisker! I love Warriors, and I'm sure I will love this! Eaglepaw dipped his brown-and-white head, amber eyes glowing in the ever-dimming light of the forest.This part is kinda ...

Hey Amylith, This is really cool! But I think I would change one thing. 'Teach me to love the sting of their thorns'. I would change it to 'Teach me ...

Okay I'm done reading! I really like it! :D I think you should put something about how she felt about killing people. Had she ever killed someone before? I kinda ...

Hi Arya, :D This is very interesting! But I would have the Prologue be the start of chapter 1, because some people don't read the Prologue.And maybe have the Prologue ...

Hi! I really like it! My favorite part is when she pushed Bradley. :D One little thing though. When Bradley says,“Come one babe, what’s wrong?” I think you meant "come ...