Don't you ever wonder why girl
Why he's never there for you
Don't you ever wonder why girl
What it would have been like
Don't you ever wonder why girl
Why he's got to be that Way
Any time of day girl, all you gotta do is shout
I'll be at your side forever
Any time of night girl, all you gotta do is yell
I'll be there for you forever.
Any time, Any where, All you gotta do is shout
I'll be in your life forever
Don't you ever wonder why girl
Why he treated you like that
Don't you ever wonder why girl
He was never there for you
Don't you ever wonder, Don't you ever wonder
Never there, any time, any where
And all you had, to do is shout
Make me hear, what you gotta say
Any time of day girl, all you gotta do is shout
I'll be at your side forever
Any time of night girl, all you gotta do is yell
I'll be there for you forever.
Any time, Any where, All you gotta do is shout
I'll be in your life forever
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The constant repetition started getting on my nerves, to be absolutely honest. Maybe it wouldn't irritate me as much with music, but since that isn't exactly possible, formatting this so that there's a space between when you change what you're repeating would make it easier to read. Part of my irritation arises from the fact that there's no clear signal where one verse ends and the new one begins. Proper punctuation would also help in this regard.
Some of the lines + repetitions did not make sense, though, such as "Don't you ever wonder why girl / What it would have been like". How can you wonder why what anything?
I did feel a solid beat, though, which was good.
Hi Jackpot!
It doesn't sound like a whole song. I don't know if i like how it keeps on say 'Don't you ever wonder why girl' or not. I can hear it in my mind in different themes,rap, classic, hip hop, and whatever else there is.
keep on writing!
Jungle