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That was really powerful. And, it gives you a perfect idea of what the on-lookers were thinking when that all happened. It was kind of short though, it would be ...

Strangely every piece I've been reading lately I've been liking. This was a good poem, and I liked the way you described the pain which lead to the cutting. Be ...

I really liked the word choice and the description you used in this piece. It sounded meaningful, and it hooked me right in. A couple nit picks: “Be patient in ...

I have to admit. When I looked at the title, I didn't immediately think of Anne Frank. I thought of cats, and once I started reading, I started crying. The ...

I really enjoyed this piece! It rhymed well, and it had a mice flow. It reminded me of this song by Greenday (yes, Hobbes listens to Greenday) called "Brain Stew" ...

I really liked the description, and how the story flowed in such a beautiful way. One little nit pick Another rocket is on is way It should be, "Another rocket ...

This was really good. I got the message and it reminded me of me and my best friend. Now, it didn't flow the way I thought it would, it could ...

Two words: AMEN SISTER!!! I know how you feel, and this piece couldn't be anymore truthful. Some might think it's gross, but that's just how women work. You showed perfect ...

It was very good. It showed a lot of emotion through out. Now there were some parts that you were phasing (music term: meaning that it's not in sinc and ...

I loved it!! I don't know why but it reminded me of the little book called rainbow fish. He had all these pretty shiny rainbow scales and no one else ...

Um... My first thought was that this was a book report. Then, I thought about the freedom of slaves. Then, I was worried that it was about something dirty. So, ...

Okay, when writing a sentience you always say it in one line, and not split it between two lines. For example: He was so sweet. (Not) He was so sweet. ...

Normally I like sweet and simple, but this one seemed a little TOO simple, if ya know what I mean. I think you should take the poem and stretch it ...

C'est super! J'adore ca! But, I think the story didn't flow as nicely as I thought it would. Each new stanza didn't really seem to have anything in common with ...

I loved it! I couldn't stop reading!!! So, did he die? You left a lot of questions unanswered, which is a good thing. when you're writing you your reader to ...