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All advice will help. Now, I'm just an amateur author, with all this help, I will get better and better. Thanks.

I like it, it shows how humans try to make themselves feel better by making others like them. You also show in a very abstract way that humans can change. ...

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*Shivers* I think you should be writing a horror genre and a mystery genre. This story is awsome. I first thought it was just a normal kidnapping, not at all ...

I made as many changes too make it better. I focused on all the points you made and changed them. I also added a character bio to help get a ...

Why Thunderstorms Exist Characters: Thundresa: a tall red headed girl, who brutally murdered her parents in a raging fury. She never was able to find a true friend, but victims. ...

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Ok, I'm really confused, who is Sarah and Nathaniel, are they brothers and sisters? When does this take place?