JonQuill

Hey! So, yes I did like this, it's a nice and pleasant read :) I just noticed that a couple of lines didn't make too much sense to me. The ...

Hey, here I am, doing you a review ;) The first thing I noticed is that you don't have any paragraphing here. You don't even start a new paragraph when ...

Hello there! This was a beautifully constructed poem that shines light on a somewhat controversial topic in a bitter sweet way. Your word choices beautifully contrast each other between the ...

This was fantastic. I honestly had music playing in my head as I started reading it, maybe because this poem is so rhythmic and vivid. You controlled these aspects very ...

Oh man, I really liked this. Such vivid imagery was inspired by your words, some images were really confronting, and even somewhat disturbing and I like that in literature. I ...

Hi there! You have a very fluid writing style, but this one sentence is still a little choppy;""and even went through spiritual enlightenment," something about it just makes it too ...

Hey, alright so, I'm going to be honest here. I think you are a good writer, and as you said, this is just something you wrote quickly, maybe for the ...

Hey there. Okay, so I'm going to say that I liked the dialogue between Cerena and Ania, you can definitely relate their conflict to real life. I noticed a lot ...

Hello there! So, I have a few things to say here. First of all, I like the message; those who live the complicated and glamorous lives some of us dream ...

Hey there! Reading this poem, it is pretty clear this is a style you are just starting to work with. I personally think it's a good style, it has potential, ...

Oh man, oh man oh man, I liked this :) I love steampunk, and this is just so imaginative and entertaining! I like how the start of your story is ...

I like your style! I really only have a few small things I can point out, but honestly, if you copy and paste your story into a word document you'll ...

I like the ominous atmosphere this story creates, right from the first sentence. I actually thought this had a good fluidity to it, and your action sequences are easy to ...