Hey, poetry normally isn't my thing, so my review might not mean that much to you.
It seemed that you were rhyming every two of your lines together until the very end. I'm not sure you meant to do that, but if so then I think that was a very smart idea. It's like you were escaping from what you had set upon yourself, no longer rhyming like you had intended at the beginning of the poem. This whole poem seemed like it was just the story of escape, which for me is a new way of getting a message across and I kind of like that, since in a way it's another form of escape. The only thing that really bothered me was the structure of this. Some of the words didn't quite fit with what you were saying and you capitalized the beginning of every line despite there being no commas. I guess I can't really say anything about that though, since this is a poem of escape you can do anything you want with this. Just a little side note though, some of the lines didn't really have any significant meaning to this poem or her escape.
Sushi
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