Jon

Thank you, Piggy! :D I agree - I'm going to go back and add more imagery as to what the Ruby is - and other such stuff. Sapphires are my ...

O_O I totally did not catch that spelling error. >.< I agree with what you guys had to say, somewhat, and I'll try to revise it a wee' bit. Maybe ...

Piggy, lol. The thing with the pollen is that it's a flower. The narrator is dying, actually, lol. I could go into technicalities with the gravity and flying and smoke...but ...

Haha, thanks everyone! ^^ I'm glad you like it.

...Aw. That's all I can say. ^^

The piggy said to...and I thought you did too? >.> I can always change it back! (I dunno'. T.T)

Piggy: I agree with you...I'll tweak the ending a bit. ^^ thanks! Pengu: Well, I'm not too sure I want it in the present tense, but I like the very ...

Navita -- Thank you! I definitely see what you mean about the redundancy of "right now". Actually, I meant this to act asa conversation between two people - but only ...

Thanks, Shepard! -Jon :D

Thankyou, guys! I tried to flesh it out some, make it more...more. ^_^ -Jon

I had the same feeling, Shepherd. ^^ I think I might add onto this.

I actually have a lot of experience with death...more than the average person. But, I've never done what was mentioned in the poem. Glad you liked it!

Wsto -- I meant that to be that way because the next is "Move"...it's supposed to make that jarring effect with the word "move". Haha, Glad you liked it. ^^

Street -- That's horrible! O: I'm sorry. :/

Haha, thank you, guys. :D The flow -- I know, I should tweak it a bit. Haha