Jon

The diamond girl was flawless, her form and gait pristine. God made her eyes from stars and seas, and stroked his jealousy. You talk of her in a way that ...

Hibi, I liked this! I loved the common-voice it had; I could relate to most of what you said. A few things, though: or getting sunshine in your eyes. This ...

Hey, Holly! Okay, you've got this little cozy piece of work that's almost like a story-tale...and so I'm going to help it get the most you can out of it...and ...

Let me first say that I love the flow in your starting lines! :D Take me back in time anemone, you could have been ambrosia, where I could have known ...

I could ask the darkness to hide me and the light around me to become night— but even in darkness I cannot hide from you. To you the night shines ...

The others have mentioned most of it, so that leaves me to say that I liked it, Eric. I don't normally read many lyrics, but being that it had "Eraqio" ...

Hey Anda-ness! Here as requested. So! At first reading, I was like "...what?". However, even in my confusion, I liked it. This led me to read it agian, which gave ...

My heart was once filled with bitterness But you changed me from that first smile This was the only part I had a problem with -- it sounds too cliched, ...

I don't have much to say here, because I loved this poem! Now, usually in my critiques I spend a long time -- cause' I don't find loads of poems ...

Tears of blood I understand you're going for a symbolic 'Jesus-like' crying of blood. However, it's a bit clichéd in writing. Also, you start out with it -- making it ...

Hi, Bailey! :D (I first called you Hailey, I'm sorry!) :oops: I hear the music. In the wind and rain. You make too sharp of a stop in your poem ...

Hello, FQ! First off, I thought this poem had a *nice* fragile nature to it. Howevere, there were some spots that were cliché. Maybe it was when, Don't need the ...

I really don't have too much to say. However, I think if you could flesh it out a bit more...it'd be better. I get that they're on a hammock...but where? ...

Hello, I'm Jon! :P Let me start by saying that when you rhyme, you have to be careful. In a lot of places you seem to force your words -- ...

Hey, Tiff! (Sorry about yesterday night, my computer spazzed. >.< I was going to do it then, but yeah...) Anyway, I liked this! However, I did have some issues: absent ...