She smiled at him.
It was a warm sort of
smile, absent of the anger
and spite he had expected
and full of kindness and strength.
It was almost mocking in sincerity,
like she had just told a joke
and he had missed the punch line.
--perhaps he was the punch line--
Where he had expected her to be
cold and bitter, she remained as warm
as she had ever been.
It was the kindness that confused him
--perhaps he was craving her temper--
To give him the triumph of knowing
she still mourned the loss of their love.
But she did not give him
such a victory, hardly acknowledging
it had ever existed at all.
Had she frowned or looked startled
--perhaps a bit flustered--
it would have been best.
Had she been perturbed that
he was there at all,
he would have been satisfied.
But to smile?
It was so merciless.
Oooh, hey there, Tiff. I loved your poem. Really, I did.
Adored it.
Anyhoo, like Classy said, that ^ line ruins your beautiful river-flow poem.
This was a very well written and executed poem. My only nitpick is the line Classy mentioned. 
So, nice job.
Tata.
-Mizz
Hiya OverEasy! Classy here for a review. 
--perhaps he was the punch line--
Jenna> on the topic of stanzas, I rarely ever have stanzas in my poetry for whatever reason xD it's not that I am opposed to them, it's that I find they rarely fit in my poems lol.
Jon> lol I have never watched the Desperate House wives, so I'm not sure how to avoid sounding like it's narrator, but! I will take a second look at those lines xD
I'll probably edit at some point today
Hey, Tiff! (Sorry about yesterday night, my computer spazzed. >.< I was going to do it then, but yeah...)
Anyway, I liked this! However, I did have some issues:
absent of the anger
and spite he had expectedandfull of kindness and strength.
--perhaps he was craving her temper--
But she did not give himsuch athat success,
hardly acknowledging it had
ever existed at all.
But to smile?
It was so merciless.
Hey, Tiff!
As always, I love your work. It's beautiful, and seems so natural like it's meant to be read out loud. I do think it needs stanzas though (I hope that's not the spacing issue you mentioned.)
The ending seemed a little abrupt, like it had been cut off. The other lines have a lot more words in them than the last two. Adding a few more words of description might help it feel more complete.
like she had just told a joke
and he had missed the punch line.
--perhaps he was the punch line--
Where he had expected her to be
cold and bitter, she remained as warm
as she had ever been
It was decent, but you shouldn't cut sentences in half to save the flow, it just screwed the flow up entirely..
OverEasy wrote:Forgive me if the spacing is a bit off right now, I am posting this on my phone.
She smiled at him.
#FF0000 ">It was a warm sort of
smile,
absent of the anger
#FF0000 ">and spite he had expected and full of
kindness and strength. It was almost mocking in sincerity,
like she had just told a joke#FF0000 ">,
and he had missed the punch line.
--perhaps he was the punch line--
Where he had expected her to be cold and bitter,
#FF0000 ">she remained as warm
as she had ever been.
It was the kindness that confused him
--perhaps he was craving her temper--
#FF0000 ">To give him the
triumph of knowing she still mourned the
loss of their love.
#FF0000 ">But she did not
give him such a success,
hardly acknowledging that it had
ever existed at all.
Had she frowned or looked startled
--perhaps a bit flustered--
it would have been best.
Had she been perturbed
that he was there at all,
he would have been satisfied.
But to smile?
It was so merciless.
Hmm.
I really liked it.
The whole idea of it was good and it was well written
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