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John Locke

  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Historical Fiction Re: Chalk Circles - 1

    Hello, my friend. First, ah! A story about magicians! How I do so love magicians. The Bartimaeus Trilogy, for example. I wrote my own story about magicians, though it takes ...

    Fri Jan 03, 2014 10:41 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Soul's Decay : Chapter One

    Hello, my friend. First, might I say that you have a very bold, dramatic writing voice. Your blunt descriptions of the final moments of this girl and the fox drew ...

    Fri Jan 03, 2014 7:32 pm
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic Re: All This Time Part 2 of 2

    Hello, my friend. First, once again, I love your writing. I do not often read such truth, but you have placed it before my eyes. It is a welcome gift. ...

    Fri Jan 03, 2014 6:15 am
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Romantic Re: All This Time Part 1 of 2

    Hello, my friend. First, you have drawn me in with your writing. Once I saw that this was realistic, I groaned. I detest all realistic fiction, but I read on. ...

    Fri Jan 03, 2014 5:43 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Ignore

    Hello, my friend. First, might I say that I respect you for writing in the present. I detest it myself, for I do not have the ability to write in ...

    Fri Jan 03, 2014 5:18 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: *deleted*

    Hello, my friend. First, may I say that you are a fantastic writer. As well, I have finally found someone else who writes with multiple points of view! Ah! I ...

    Fri Jan 03, 2014 4:59 am
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Mad World

    Hello, my friend. First, I loved this premise. The flashbacks, the small child. All of it. And, I was going to put this at the end, but you need to ...

    Thu Jan 02, 2014 7:20 pm
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Other Re: Fragile

    Hello, my friend. First, let me say that I know nothing of the nit-picky poetry rules and whatnot. I can only really focus on how the poem made me feel ...

    Thu Jan 02, 2014 6:53 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Science Fiction Re: Without A Trace - Chapter One

    Hello, my friend. First, I do not usually focus on grammar unless I am requested to, since I am not gifted in that respect, so I will focus on other ...

    Thu Jan 02, 2014 6:46 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Teen Fiction Re: Prologue: A Puzzling Victim

    Hello, my friend. First, allow me to say that I did rather enjoy your story. The premise was enticing and I found myself wanting to read on after your little ...

    Thu Jan 02, 2014 6:30 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: The Story of Liam - Chapter 1

    Hello, my friend. First, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. Your writing created an atmosphere immediately and crafted an image of a world with ease. You were descriptive, but not to ...

    Thu Jan 02, 2014 5:20 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Howl - Chapter 5

    Hello, my friend. First, a novel of this sort must have some way of explaining the mythos and the nature of the supernatural. Some writers forget that, so I applaud ...

    Wed Jan 01, 2014 5:17 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Howl - Chapter 4

    Hello, my friend. First, let me applaud you for that twist. Novels of this genre usually keep the supernatural away from the public eye, but you have Blue bounding into ...

    Wed Jan 01, 2014 4:56 am
  • Poetry » Review, Realistic Re: Growing Up

    Hello, my friend. First, I loved this. I often struggle with moving on from the past, so I felt the lingering emotions within each line. The stanzas each seemed to ...

    Wed Jan 01, 2014 4:09 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Teen Fiction, Fantasy Re: Howl - Chapter 3

    Hello, my friend. First, I think that this was a vital chapter. However, you didn't have to be so forward about it. Of course, learning about characters are important and ...

    Wed Jan 01, 2014 12:22 am


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— Ray Bradbury, Fahrenheit 451