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Cool. Cheers ppl. I'll add on as soon as I can, Im all too busy lately. I wish I could just focus on my stories, but I cant at the ...

Thanks a lot for these comments, keep em coming. All comments are helpful, but I'd like people to include in their posts, if its not too much to ask, wether ...

Yes, this was very well done. Quite good in fact, although I'll agree that the Victorian couple, ruined it. You could do so much more with this, but overall it ...

Lol, thanks. Its always good to hear such things. Comments are appreciated, so thanks again.

Well Im going to give Misty here a great big clap, as that was just fantastic, nicely done. I agree, completely, which is I know, lazy of me, but hey. ...

funnae! Thats what this story is. Quite enjoyable really, but Im confused, shold this be treated as an actual story, or is it just something enjoyable to write and read? ...

Just quickly because I have to go: "Is this a heaven," take out the 'a'. I promise, I'll come back and give it a good go-over.

Thanks man. Um, Im going to leave it as it is for now, let it fade into obscurity until the fullstory emerges in my head. I just wanted to write ...

Thanks a lot fishr! The dialogue part is kinda explained by the Type 1 Osteogenesis Imperfecta: Its a rare disease, that makes the bones especially brittle. For instance were Mr. ...

I didnt read the second part, but as to the first: Get rid of the brackets. Okay? They must be gone. They serve no purpose. Overall I liked and enjoyed ...

Thats okay, thanks for taking the time to review this. I'll revise chapter three then put in the next chapter. Coming soon!!

Awesome. Thanks for taking the time to critique this. A lot of what you said made sense and I'll set about fixing, altering or rephrasing those sentences. The introduction...I can ...

Due to the overwhelming lack of interest from the majority, I will change this from an RPG to a story book that follows Shakyra's story. I'll come back and add ...

Thanks a lot. Comments are much appreciated. And Im sure you'll do better as you get older.

Thanks, Fishr. Comments ar much appreciated, but going by the lack of them I'd say a lot of people havent seen Unbreakable, so your not alone there... Its tuesday...