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Hello and welcome, Professor Rabbit, to YWS. This first piece of yours is fairly well written, so kudos on that. Unfortunately, it doesn't really do much at all with the ...

This is romantic fiction? Haha. I thought it was good, a little superficial at the moment. I mean, is this a short stand alone piece? Or will this continue? Knowing ...

Tannar watched as Karenna watch them go, and felt a small, a very small, stab of guilt that he might have ruined her chances with the handsome youth. Even should ...

I read, I liked and I haven't much more to say unfortunately. Not much really happened. I will say I thought it a tad abrupt leaving off where you did ...

Ahaha, a fear of cats XD. That was good. I remember reading this quite some time ago, Gyr. It doesn't seem too different really, but then my memory isn't so ...

Have I ever told you that I like you, Sam? No? Well, its true. I do. The idea, as put forth by others, that the creation of mood is essentially ...

Well, its certainly interesting. But there isn't very much to comment on, so I'll with-hold judgement until I've read further. It was written fairly well; there were some comma splices ...

"For Lords sake woman, where's my food?" That just sounds odd. Substitute 'Lords' with 'Gods' where he and Charlotte's younger brother David were sat, waiting. Charlotte's mother laid the food ...

Well now, I agree and disagree with some of the things said here. One, as Grif said, it's over-written - there is brilliance in simplicity, pare it down a bit. ...

His breath was ragged. Nervous. Laced with terror and fear and hopelessness. Hopelessness. * The feel of its potency against his chest. Its slender neck, cool and harsh and rigid ...

he was so full of frustration hat his fingers threatened to pry the bars apart, if only for something to do. that With the force, he had displayed earlier, Marshall ...

swop swap I'll see that you all loose your jobs lose The stable scene did not feel rushed, not in terms of content, but in terms of what it reveals? ...

Ah, the beloved Imp has been released to us once more. Be thankful, no? I quite enjoyed this. It's vintage Imp. Your style is rather eclectic, your word choice haphazard ...

I think this was a very interesting and well written piece. It's quite the clever idea, actually. Sometimes such ideas don't translate well, but I think this one did, so ...

Ah, Gyr. It's always fun to read your stuff. I seriously didn't like K'ratcha telling his story in the manner of a fable - it was both annoying and off-putting. ...