Jetpack

Hi. This is my first review in a few weeks, so my critiquing skills might be a little rusty. Nitpicks and so on: So many, that they do go unnoticed ...

Hi, want a review? All those innocent lives, But it's a living I guess Did you realise that you've repeated 'live'? It sounds sort of odd to the reader, especially ...

I've heard you're looking around for a review, so I figured I might oblige you. I've critiqued this as a piece of writing though, rather than the experience it must ...

This is so sweet. I suppose I can't really say I love the idea if it actually happened, but it's so easy to relate to. The first half is written ...

I'll try and build on what's already been mentioned, but mostly I have just a few minor errors to point out. Home was nowhere to be found. This reads, to ...

I love the way it's written. It sounds very archaic and like an old fairy tale, which I suppose was the effect you wanted. The whole piece is very cleverly ...

So, a critique. Well, to comment on the piece in general, quality of writing aside, this is quite clichéd. The love triangle between the cute guy who happens to be ...

Well, firstly, it IS very short, even for a prologue. It's so short, I question whether it's necessary for the following novel - if it is, then you could flesh ...

It's quite short, so I'll do you a line-by-line since there's no real plot to it. That's not a bad thing, by any means, though. My comments are in bold. ...

I love it, too. It's very original, and telling it from the "villain's" (if indeed the 'witch' is the villain in your tale) perspective will be fun to write as ...

I suppose this could be considered atheistic, in a way, but it fits the metaphor that you intended it to have even better. Oddly, I was reminded of Nazi Germany ...

If you can even write something cohesive in a Word War, and you clearly can, you deserve a medal. :P The product of my most recent Word War was a ...

The newspaper clipping format is fairly familiar to this genre, as far as I know, but it's a solid start for a mystery. I look forward to seeing where you ...