JesusFreak900

Thanks for the comments! I'll edit the errors as soon as I get the chance. I do intend to keep the story rolling, though! Stay tuned :)

I feel violated.... But in all seriousness this was a very well written story that was well put together. I literally gasped at the last scene with the father. Ughhh... ...

Wow! From the first description of blood pouring down his face, you had me hooked! The simple, yet brutal depiction of this scene was near flawless. You were so detailed ...

Gorgeous in a simple kind-of-way. The rhyme scheme flowed beautifully and made me almost want to sing it. Please continue writing these gorgeous poems!