Paintings

by travlingthejourney

Published September 11, 2011

Paintings hanging on my wall,
none too big, none too small.
Collages, drawings, colors galore,
far too good for a dusty store.
Broadway, Dickerson, and Berlin,
not one alike, not one a twin.
Some have been here for many years,
occasionally we come up with tears.
Some with dogs, some with beds,
even one about newlyweds.
These paintings hang on my wall,
none too big, none too small.

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mellophone7
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mellophone7 wrote a review Review · Sep 12, 2011

I kinda liked this. Me, being a painter, I clicked on it, and I wasn't disappointed with what I found. I really love poems that effortlessly rhyme, so thumbs up for that, although I agree with a previous comment when it stated that it didn't flow quite right in a few places. Still, short and sweet, and I like that. Keep writing!!

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Cailey
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Cailey wrote a review Review · Sep 11, 2011

this was great. I can't think of much of a review to give you. It was already simple enough. You had good rhyming, your rhythm was good (although there were a couple places I had to read twice because the first time they didn't flow right). I didn't catch any grammar or spelling mistakes. I just like the way this is so simple and cute, and I was able to visualize everything you were saying. I could see the paintings. So, great job, keep writing!

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JesusFreak900
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JesusFreak900 commented Comment · Sep 11, 2011

Gorgeous in a simple kind-of-way. The rhyme scheme flowed beautifully and made me almost want to sing it. Please continue writing these gorgeous poems!

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Gamergirl
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Gamergirl wrote a review Review · Sep 11, 2011

travlingthejourney wrote:Paintings hanging on my wall,
none too big, none too small.
Collages, drawings, colors galore,
far too good for a dusty store.
Broadway, Dickerson, and Berlin,
not one alike, not one a twin.
Some have been here for many years,
occasionally we come up with tears.
Some with dogs, some with beds,
even one about newlyweds.
These paintings hang on my wall,
none too big, none too small.


I really enjoyed this piece of poetry! Short sweet and simple. Lovey topic you chose and I love your use of repetition. :D

MaryQuiteContrary commented Comment · Sep 11, 2011

That was a very cute, compact poem. At first I thought it would be too trite, but I ended up liking it very much.



here is the deepest secret nobody knows (here is the root of the root and the bud of the bud and the sky of the sky of a tree called life; which grows higher than the soul can home or mind can hide) and this is the wonder that's keeping the stars apart i carry your heart (i carry it in my heart)
— e.e. cummings