JennyImStory

This was a really good chapter! It gave us insight into Luna's life and you did it in a really dynamic way. Instead of just telling the reader Luna's mother ...

Whoa. Well hello nightmares! Your description and imagery is SPOT ON! Your description of the creature was pretty haunting. I like Luna as well, she seems like a very layered ...

Alright, Grace is just a GREAT character, she's got a sense of humor and is very proactive. I like how the plot isn't pushing her to action but that she ...

This is a cool concept! Like a Choose your own adventure game but better! I'm excited to see just how your characters even get to the haunted bungalow. I have ...

Well James is quite a well spoken teenage boy. I didn't know those existed! Anyway, the whole nightmare sequence in the beginning was really cool. At first I was confused ...

Okay I LOVED this! This was so cool! The world seems so planned out and I loved the casual humor you put in the beginning. This being a prologue and ...

This princess be a badass. And to that I say: WOOOOO! This was really cool, I like how she's got lying down to a science and has more secrets then ...

We have answers! Yay! But now we have an Illuminati-esk-secret overlords-thing?? Whoa! This story just got cooler. Who were her parents?? Do they have a big role in this new ...

This world is so epic! And I am at your mercy as I will continue to just sit here waiting for you to post more on this world soon! Alright, ...

This was SO CUTE! And your world seems so expansive! You just casually added all this stuff about wars and planets and I was just like "I wanna know EVERYTHING!" ...

That really was a cliff hanger! I'm excited to see how you continue this story and what sort of fictional twists are to come. Will this become a survival story? ...

I can't even believe it. I have MORE questions! I want to know what happened to the red house family! That scene with the little girl was also great! I ...

Well this thing got intense FAST! I liked the opener, I could see the camera panning over from the street, to the house, to Aiden's room. Also the dialogue in ...

This is pretty darn great! I like how you hinted at the information the reader would need to know later on, allowing them to decipher and fill in the blanks ...

You did this when you were 12? WHOA! I was too busy being an idiot to do anything productive at 12. I thought the concept of this story was really ...