JennyImStory

Hello Patato! I thought this was a nice little skit to introduce your characters with. I noticed some grammar issues, but I suck at those things myself so I'll leave ...

Whoaaa this is trippy. Now on the the review! I loved the tone of this, there wasn't really time, and the setting was left vague and blank. That worked so ...

I haven't reviewed this yet?!?! How did that happen?? Well, what better time then Review Day . So. Gabriel is awesome. Who'd a' thunk it! Seriously, I really like his ...

I've just got to say this now, the pacing in this was amazing. A personal preference of mine is nice easy pacing, giving the reader to process the setting, and ...

Ohhhhhhhh! This is so cool! :) :) Now on the the review: The beginning was a touch confusing, you literally dropped the reader as well as the character into this ...

WHOAA! This world is cool! I can really tell you've done a lot of world building, and it truly is fascinating. We sympathized with the character Rory almost instantly, and ...

This was a great piece of writing, just thought I'd put that out there. It was really emotional and the backstory you weaved through it really added to the experience. ...

Oh man . . . I am so happy I read this broad daylight. As usual the overall tone of this story is just great! You really get the reader ...

This seems SO COOL!! I love the title, "Child House" has this creepy simplicity to it. Anyway, this was quite a prologue. We already have a lot of information, and ...

This seems like a cool start! I love how you introduced magic right off the bat. I always love a good magic system and can't wait to see the different ...

So you seem to be taking your time setting up characters and setting, which is really nice, going into enough, but not too much, detail about personalities and whatnot is ...

This world seems so cool! Having such non-human characters and settings is just so refreshing and there is so much to world build! Your characters seemed very well rounded, Sheeka's ...

Well this is mysterious . . . So this was a nice chapter, the main character has a pretty intense life for an eleven year old. The whole idea with ...

Well this is different. We don't have much of a plot yet, but the characters seem alright. I assume that the main character "Suz" or Susan may become quite the ...

Poor, poor Oliver. He can't catch a break can he? This chapter was a mixture of informative and over all cute. I'm excited to see what the other kingdoms are ...