Jeni

Nice. Everything is pretty good, it's a well written chapter. Maybe you could have added a little bit more.-jeni p.s Can't wait to read more!

Nice. I can't wait to read more. The only thing is, make sure you connect the stories. Everything did go well. This one wasn't as long, so that's good.-jeni

like you said, it was long. it was good, there was a lot of detail. i really liked it.-jeni p.s it was long

it was good. there was a lot of detail, and good at spacing. that's one thing i am not good at. in the beginning, it was a little hard to ...

I really like it, but make sure to watch capitalization, you forgot a few.-Jeni

I agree with some of the others. The forth and fifth line don't exactly fit in the poem, but it seems like something else needs to be in place of ...

It's a nice poem. I agree though, the rhythm in the second stanza and on are off, but over all pretty good.-Jeni

It is a pretty well written poem, but it could be better. The good thing is there were no real grammar errors. -Jeni