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Jaz

  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Here I Am

    This is good. Romantic in the sense of how you can use your body, the only thing you really possess if all else is taken away, to aid another person. ...

    Oct 7, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Just a building...

    I enjoyed reading this and forming the image in my mind of the abandoned building. Is it a church of some sort? If so then I think maybe there is ...

    Oct 7, 2010
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Books you loved more than the movie...

    I Am Legend - Richard Matheson. The movie was a fun vampire blockbuster but I think the novel is much better. I wouldn't actually describe it as a story about ...

    Oct 7, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Ending.

    I quite like this! The repetition and the way you tweak the sole word to really connect to the sentence its a part of and then have it link to ...

    Oct 7, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Sister

    This is simple but heartfelt and I can relate to it. When I was quite young my brother moved away and I really wanted to ask how he could leave ...

    Oct 7, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Voids.

    This is beautifully written and quite frankly, a little disturbing, but I sense that's what you were going for. I think you write really well and I liked the sort ...

    Oct 6, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: One summer, two people and too much to handle .

    Think the above poster did a great job of pointing out grammar issues so I'll simply say well done! Bittersweet - you've captured the feelings of a (first) crush really ...

    Oct 6, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Together

    I usually really like carefully chosen detail in short stories like this but also appreciate the way that saying little is sometimes far more effective. What's left out allows readers ...

    Oct 6, 2010


The inner machinations of my mind are an enigma.
— Patrick Star