JayShay

Allow me to explain somethings, the characters are truly in tune to their environments and their feelings as they lived in a time and place where people are not concerned ...

Right off the bat I love the repetition. Why? Repetition is catchy, Repetition is catchy, Repetition is catchy, lol Anyways, I love how the presentings are opposites to the receivings. ...

I have mixed feelings about this piece of work. Forstarters I like your wording. Though you could use work on the line containing emptiness. There are better words that would ...

lol I did like Chacer did with the Canterbury Tales. To make the lines rhyme he sometimes sent some of his lines to the next line if that makes sense. ...

Thanks for reviewing. As for the typing errors, it was almost midnight and I couldnt think lol, I will fix them momentarily