JaxSamford

Short and sweet, yet powerful. I definitely enjoyed this, and your vocabulary was pretty great. The only problems I'm seeing thus far is how your stanzas are structured, and your ...

First of all, great prologue, though it switches between things rather fast.. A red haired elf perched on... The red red haired elf... Instead of repeating the fact that she ...

Beautiful! Nice beginning, middle, and end, though a little hard to discern (perhaps a better transition between the pounding thunder and breathless silence- some sort of clear change to signal ...

Insanely powerful. I like how instead of making it all about how terrible this person really was, you showed that perhaps somewhere he did care, but he was afraid. It ...

This was definitely fun to read! I totally enjoyed the dark feeling it gave my mind, and it was well written enough to make me ask myself what would happen ...