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Re: The Heir
Grammar-Red Anything else-Bold ----> or
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: The Twins.
Hey, Welcome to YWS! How are you liking it so far? I love it here! :) This was good and if this was the result of boredom, then you're a ...
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: The Highway's Children
Hey, First of all welcome to YWS! Second, please rate this. We don't want the little kiddies accidentally reading this :). Now on to the review, I may warn you ...
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: Please Mommy
I like this. I thought you were at first speaking as a child whose mother is battling depression or something, then I saw "tail wag one more time' and I ...
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: Relax, Take It Easy (In loving memory of Taylor)
Wow. I'm about to cry. I'm sorry for your loss, of your sister, friend, cousin. Sorry. :( This was really good. :) You have good, I don't know how to ...
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: The Death of a Nobody
I think I get this. Your uncle was a maniac-depressive, who after years of selling his t-shirts, "Captain Coconut" ended up dying. I'm sorry about that, if I'm right. =_( ...
Jun 18, 2010 -
Re: The Things I Hate About You
I like this. As Griff said, you don't have much structure here and it's a bit hard on the eyes to read, but if you get past the format you ...
Jun 14, 2010 -
Re: The Fall (Part Two)
Again, it's amazing! :) I like your idea of just giving a taster, it leaves us begging for more. The dialouge is believable and the story moves at a good ...
Jun 14, 2010 -
Re: The Fall (Part One)
Oh my god. Wow. I am amazed. To be honest, I thought this would be a typical teenage boring story, where Seth is either her jerkface boyfriend who she will ...
Jun 14, 2010 -
Re: Gray~ Chp. 1
Hey there. I see this as a vampire story. Please God, don't tell me it's a vampire book. If it's not then HUZZAH :). So far, it seems that a ...
Jun 13, 2010 -
Re: This Summer - Chapter One
Hey, I thought I'd check this out because I liked the title :). Since you already got the grammar done by other reviewers I'll just give you my opinion on ...
Jun 13, 2010 -
Re: your love in denim
Hey, I liked this, it had the sweet romance fluff feel. I burst out laughing when I read that he pushed her into the lake and then she pulled him ...
Jun 13, 2010 -
Re: Underneath It All [Ch. 1]
Hey, Well, this is MUCH better than the last version of it "Lies of the Pretty Girls' but I still feel it's just another version of it. The writing is ...
Jun 13, 2010 -
Re: A Secret
Hey, First of all, I love your avvie :) Now, to the review. This was a good poem but during it, I felt like the narrator was the secret. I ...
Jun 13, 2010 -
Re: Desires - Chapter 2
Hey, So this chapter was a bit of a dissapointment to me. Chapters are supposed to further the story but the only advancement this chapter made was this Ryan person ...
Jun 13, 2010
