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  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: The Heir

    Grammar-Red Anything else-Bold ----> or

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Twins.

    Hey, Welcome to YWS! How are you liking it so far? I love it here! :) This was good and if this was the result of boredom, then you're a ...

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Highway's Children

    Hey, First of all welcome to YWS! Second, please rate this. We don't want the little kiddies accidentally reading this :). Now on to the review, I may warn you ...

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Please Mommy

    I like this. I thought you were at first speaking as a child whose mother is battling depression or something, then I saw "tail wag one more time' and I ...

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Relax, Take It Easy (In loving memory of Taylor)

    Wow. I'm about to cry. I'm sorry for your loss, of your sister, friend, cousin. Sorry. :( This was really good. :) You have good, I don't know how to ...

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: The Death of a Nobody

    I think I get this. Your uncle was a maniac-depressive, who after years of selling his t-shirts, "Captain Coconut" ended up dying. I'm sorry about that, if I'm right. =_( ...

    Jun 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: The Things I Hate About You

    I like this. As Griff said, you don't have much structure here and it's a bit hard on the eyes to read, but if you get past the format you ...

    Jun 14, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The Fall (Part Two)

    Again, it's amazing! :) I like your idea of just giving a taster, it leaves us begging for more. The dialouge is believable and the story moves at a good ...

    Jun 14, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: The Fall (Part One)

    Oh my god. Wow. I am amazed. To be honest, I thought this would be a typical teenage boring story, where Seth is either her jerkface boyfriend who she will ...

    Jun 14, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Gray~ Chp. 1

    Hey there. I see this as a vampire story. Please God, don't tell me it's a vampire book. If it's not then HUZZAH :). So far, it seems that a ...

    Jun 13, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: This Summer - Chapter One

    Hey, I thought I'd check this out because I liked the title :). Since you already got the grammar done by other reviewers I'll just give you my opinion on ...

    Jun 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: your love in denim

    Hey, I liked this, it had the sweet romance fluff feel. I burst out laughing when I read that he pushed her into the lake and then she pulled him ...

    Jun 13, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Underneath It All [Ch. 1]

    Hey, Well, this is MUCH better than the last version of it "Lies of the Pretty Girls' but I still feel it's just another version of it. The writing is ...

    Jun 13, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Secret

    Hey, First of all, I love your avvie :) Now, to the review. This was a good poem but during it, I felt like the narrator was the secret. I ...

    Jun 13, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Desires - Chapter 2

    Hey, So this chapter was a bit of a dissapointment to me. Chapters are supposed to further the story but the only advancement this chapter made was this Ryan person ...

    Jun 13, 2010


Knowing too much of your future is never a good thing.
— Rick Riordan, The Lightning Thief