Jannie

HAHA. yeah, i realized that yesterday. tsktsk. thanks for pointing it our... :)

short.poignant.sweet. pretty poem. i liked this. it reminds me of my first poem, which was about rainbows.

It was a LITTLE poem. i dont even want to start on the grammar. but still...improve..

okayy. i read and reread this. it didn't sink in the first time *blush* i didn't like the way profanity was used,but in the did fit. i just cant quite ...

it was flat in some parts. but great in others. loved the change in moods.

who had dreams opposite from slight?.... {dang.forced to rhyme} i do this too.errr.. but i liked the rest of it.

Bang I'm ??? --- DEAD? dark...beautifully dark.

Last Line Was PERFECT. Liked the little rhyming thing.